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Cavern Cartography

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New addition for my First Contact War universe.

You remember this chubby little fella from my Faces of FCW #01
My plan was to make at least one of them into an actual scene. Although the scene changed a lot, this is the results of that!

Was quite fun. In the stream sometimes too much fun as I got distracted doing weird stuff haha.

This one initially started out with 3 point perspective and as a cavern library type place, with actual lines to begin with. Which I usually freestyle a lot more. Not that in the end I didn't lose a bit of those lines, but oh well! As for the cavern library... well not a lot of library left any more. Just like in Ponyville.

Too soon? Well... for me still all the feels
Anywho. Hope y'al enjoy some Gryphon OCs, because I've had quite a few Equines this year already.


Approx Time: 8 hours
Cavern Cartography [WIP] by AssasinMonkey


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:star::star::star::star::star-half: Overall
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:star::star::star::star::star: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star: Impact

Intriguing scene.
It looks like the quill is in a relaxed position rather than currently used in writing.
Is he perhaps trying to work on his fanfic but finds nothing to write, simply staring at the last sentence, re-reading it over and over again?
Perhaps he is working on a treaty proposal, realizing the futility in getting both sides to accede to any terms.
Maybe he is working out warfare logistics, meticulously re-evaluating his work, burdened with the understanding that any mistake may cost the lives of fellow griffins.
It could be that he is writing a letter for a friend, forewarning the impending war and imploring them to aid with the oh-so-secret and urgent plans, partly disclosed in the letter.

I feel that the lighting wants me to look at the edge of the scroll, and that white thing. I would like it to point me to the quill instead. Maybe making the white thing a dark, wooden thing. Or perhaps hide the white thing in the shadow. The quill would probably not have any specular highlights that could draw attention, but the shaft of the quill could/should be white. Even better: make the quill a different color altogether.
I think I'd like the light to come more from the top producing contrast in the face and de-emphasizing the desk, enhancing the moodiness of the scene.
I like that there is more detail in the eyes and beak, drawing attention to his expression. The same effect is achieved with the quill.
I feel his gaze is pointing me to the supposedly most important part of the scene: the content of the scroll. Which just happens to be out of view, thus arousing the desire to find out (hence the first part of this text).
I like that his face appears static, contrasted with the kinetics of the dust particles. I think that if it was a video the room would move far more than he would.
I also like that the quill looks markedly unpreened indicating either hard work done (tool is worn), or distress (the feather is literally ruffled). The latter being corroborated by the notable amount visible upper sclera of the eyes.
Finally I noticed you used a Dutch angle, further reinforcing the feeling of uneasiness. Bravo!

BTW, are those pens I see in the foreground, taunting him, as he is forced to use parts of his own body to do his work? Cheeky.